I voted that Kidney's response was insufficient. Although he tackled the main points of the question, he did so with such unclear English as to make his response unnecessarily difficult to understand. For example, what might a "detailed optioneering process" mean? Does he just mean 'we looked at several options', or is it something more technical? If the latter, he should have clarified it for the lay reader.
The final sentence shows such basic active/passive verb confusion as to suggest that Kidney did not give the response the proper consideration it deserves (how can the tanks do the commissioning?).
Finally, it would clearly have been of interest to both Hughes and the public to know what financial estimates had been made for commissioning the new tanks. It would have been considerate of Kidney to have included that information.
Tristan Webb
Posted on 31 Mar 2010 5:39 pm
I voted that Kidney's response was insufficient. Although he tackled the main points of the question, he did so with such unclear English as to make his response unnecessarily difficult to understand. For example, what might a "detailed optioneering process" mean? Does he just mean 'we looked at several options', or is it something more technical? If the latter, he should have clarified it for the lay reader.
The final sentence shows such basic active/passive verb confusion as to suggest that Kidney did not give the response the proper consideration it deserves (how can the tanks do the commissioning?).
Finally, it would clearly have been of interest to both Hughes and the public to know what financial estimates had been made for commissioning the new tanks. It would have been considerate of Kidney to have included that information.